Feedback

We got the first preview of Laila's headstone.  I don't really like it.  I have to make some changes to it so I'm posting on here what I'm thinking and would like some feedback--though, I'd prefer honest but nice feedback if possible because this is kind of a big deal to me so if you absolutely hate it, then maybe just don't comment....In the end, I'll do what I feel best about but Mike isn't a lot of help because he doesn't really care about the headstone.  So, I need some feedback from someone.

It won't be exactly like this because the fonts and colors will be different but this is probably what I want it to say.  I just highlighted some of it so you could read it better but it won't look that way.  What I want to know is if it's too much wording, (I like minimal stuff) or if it just doesn't flow well.  

I am a Child of God

Laila Faith Richards

and He has sent me here

May 2, 2011

Has given me an earthly home, 

with a family kind and dear.

Celestial glory now is mine, 

because I have endured.

July 24, 2011

I'd also like a butterfly on it because our family had a family home evening on butterflies and how they work so hard to get out of their chrysalis and how all that effort makes their wings strong, etc.  It seems appropriate now that Laila is gone.  Only, she's the butterfly but we are the ones working to get out of the chrysalis, it seems.